My Trainwreck First Draft - Part 2
First drafts and the despair that is often associated with them is not only a problem for beginner writers. Emerging and established writers admit their first drafts are almost always in disarray. So the Art of Writing creative writing retreat in Florence is doing its best to tackle this confusion and dare we say, despondency, head-on. Yes, your first draft will be all over the place. Or maybe you think it’s fabulous! Great! But then an editor comes along and says ‘well, actually, this needs a complete overhaul.’
I chatted with structural editor, Laurel Cohn, this week about why we are preparing a special Next Draft retreat this June 25-29 in Tuscany. It’s because we see, time and time again, the struggle writers have shifting their first draft mindset into their third, fourth and fifth draft mindsets.
Here’s what Laurel had to say:
A writer I’m working with reached out to me recently, despairing at the prospect of reviewing her first draft. She was a participant in The Next Draft course I run on structural editing for writers and we had, up to this point, explored some of the big picture issues such as story structure, theme, and the relationship between character and plot. Now we were up to undertaking a detailed read-through of the current draft.
I feel defeated at the outset. It's as though I have wandered into the wrong room – rather than being in home economics, I have ended up in an engineering class and it is overwhelming. I began to write my manuscript with no knowledge of how to write a book – it simply poured out in its way – and fear that now it may be all wrong. It seems like a train wreck. This is about acknowledging to myself, and you, that I am overwhelmed. Perhaps this is normal.
This writer, we’ll call her Lola, is not alone in reaching a point where she doubts herself and fears that she’s bitten off more than she can chew. Yes, it can be overwhelming to realise what lies ahead in the development process. Let’s face it, it’s an enormously challenging thing to write a book. These feelings are common and show that Lola is digesting the reality of the road ahead – a huge plus in the long term.
First drafts are messy. Yours, like Lola’s may seem like a train wreck. It may be shambolic, confused, and all over the place. It may be overly long, or under the word count you’re aiming for. All of that is fine. It’s just the first draft. And getting to the end of the first draft is an achievement in itself. In the first draft, you are discovering the story, the world in which the story is set, and the characters who will populate that world. You are experimenting, you are finding your voice, and you are playing with ideas. Hopefully, you are having fun! In later drafts, you will deepen your understanding of what you want to say and how to say it. It takes multiple drafts. But you can’t get there without that first draft, whatever state it’s in.
For example, if the inciting incident happens in the middle of the story in the first draft, that’s okay – you can move it and rearrange things. If there is way too much backstory up front, that’s okay – you can work out what you need to keep and where it should go. If the dialogue feels stilted and the characters all sound the same, that’s okay – you can dig deeper into who your characters are to discover their individual ways of expressing themselves. That’s the work of redrafting.
Loads of successful writers wail and bemoan over their messy, hopeless first drafts. They come to understand that it’s part of the creative process, even if they temporarily forget just how bad the first draft can be.
Michele de Kretser talked about this at the 2022 Sydney Writers Festival:
de Kretser said she wanted to test herself while writing her latest novel, Scary Monsters, trying out the first-person perspective for the first time. But “it was just shockingly bad. I panicked!” So she rewrote what she had, in the third person this time. Except, it happened again. “It was just SO bad. And then I remembered the thing that I manage to forget between each book, which is that the first draft is ALWAYS mortifyingly bad.” (‘Controversies, epiphanies and the case against Canva: highlights from Sydney writers’ festival’ The Guardian, Steph Harmon, 23.5.22)
It doesn’t matter how mortifyingly bad that first draft is. It doesn’t matter if you feel it is like a compost heap. It’s a first draft. And it serves a crucial purpose. It’s in the development phase over multiple drafts that you grow the idea that has been planted in that first draft. You need the compost to fertilise that seedling. It’s in the redrafting process that magic happens.
I shared some of these thoughts with Lola and was pleased to receive a reply:
You have helped me turn my attitude around and instil hope that my work can be stronger, fresher, wiser draft by draft. I will pick myself up and keep plodding forward, with the occasional huge sigh. There's a light in sight.
Great advice for other writers who are feeling overwhelmed by their messy first drafts. Thank you, Lola.
Join Laurel Cohn and Lisa Clifford for our special Next Draft retreat in Florence from June 25-29, 2023. All drafts welcome! This is a unique workshop that drills down on your revision process. Please earmark your diaries and join us in Florence for this event. The program is now up on the Art of Writing site.
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2023 Art of Writing Dates
Sunday, May 7th to Thursday, May 11th, 2023, Florence
Sunday, June 4th to Thursday, June 8th, 2023, Florence
Sunday, June 25th to Thursday, June 29th The Next Draft, for finished manuscripts.
Sunday July 9th to Thursday, July 13th, 2023, Florence
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If you’d like to share any comments or thoughts, I’d be happy to hear from you. Email me directly at lisacliffordwriter@gmail.com.
